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When season isn't summer at Buyukada, the business of people is affected in a bad way because there are no customers left to purchase anything.
This is my lead for Buyukada article.
instead of "season isn't summer"...try "summer ends" and instead of "the business of people" why not try just "business"
Thousands of Armeinan, Greek and Turkish people lived on Büyükada for more than 4 centuries. After the September 6th and 7th incidents, Armenians and Greeks were exiled because of the nemw Turkish laws.
last week people from büyükada came to us for interview and want us to publish that story at the newspaper because they want to improve tourism of island and help from the government to make that beautiful island better
orhun -- don't mention the september "incidents" until later int he article.
deniz -- you have to remember - you are not telling the story of the interview, you are telling a story that would go into a newspaper. what is your newspaper article going to be about?? or is this not your lead? did someone really come to you to write an article to improve tourism??
The population of Buyukada unbelievably decreases after the season of summer because the vacationers and the tourists leave the island.
take out "the season of" and take out "the" before vacationers and tourists
When the summer comes the life in the Princes Island becomes more active, some speciallity of the island changes.
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